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Monday, January 27, 2014

Study Break

This week's Trifecta Writing Challenge is to come up with 33 words inspired by this photo:


http://foter.com/photo/or/

 
I pose near the glass, thin arms flexed.
Will she ever look up from that text?
I’m all substance—no style.
But if I make her smile,
Who knows what could transpire next?


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I initially wrote a different limerick for this prompt. It was dark. Really dark. What does it say about me that I looked at this innocent photo and immediately went to such a macabre place? If I'm ever wrongfully accused of murdering someone (which I'm 97% certain I would never do), could such posts be used against me during my trial? I wouldn't survive prison. I talk a good game, but I'm basically soft and girly.

You know what? I'm posting it anyway. Here is "Finals Week":


She studied in vain for a test.
Watching her stirred the urge I’d repressed.
As my teeth tore her skin,
Her blood dripped from my chin.
There once was a girl named Celeste.


42 comments:

  1. In true Ivy fashion. I like your dark side best!

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    1. Haha! Why am I not surprised? You have a pretty wicked dark side yourself. Thanks, Mel!

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  2. I like the dark one the best too. That was amazing!

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    1. Thank you, Kathy! I have to say the dark one is my favorite, too. But my tendency toward the macabre freaks me out sometimes. Yikes!

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  3. Whoa, coulda sworn I mentioned how our two lovebirds are destined to meet. Love the light and the dark, Ivy!

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    1. Haha! I did get an email saying you commented, but never saw it here. I love the idea of our two getting together. Just make sure she doesn't accidently hook up with the guy in my dark piece. Lol!

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  4. Looks like the dark side is winning out but, like Kymm, I like the contrast between light and dark. In either case, a smouldering take on the prompt. :)

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    1. Thank you, Tom. :) I decided to post them both because I thought it was kinda cool that the photo inspired two wildly different prompts from my crazy brain.

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  5. "There once was a girl named Celeste." The frightening limerick was the best!

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    1. Ha! Thanks, Shawn. That's my favorite line. Since it's typically an opener, I think using it at the end (to signify her end) is the creepiest part. My brain scares me sometimes.

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  6. I'm so glad you posted them both. I'm torn about which I liked best. And your commentary made me laugh, as usual.

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    1. Thanks, Momo. I do like the dark piece best, but I'm glad I was able to come up with a light, romantic piece, too. It proves I'm not totally warped. Although, you should've seen Hubs's face when he read the dark one. I wouldn't be surprised if he hid all our knives.

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  7. well either way, i see both scenarios as wonderful writing. that dark one, oh, my!

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    1. Thank you for the wonderful comment, Sun. :)

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  8. I should adore the one about love, but it's the dark one that is inspired. Both are so well written (Limericks! Jeepers Cats Ivy is there anything you can't do...nah!) but I can see your TALENT in the dark one so much.

    Missing you but so glad to visit you here , read your amazing words...sending lots of hugs.
    xo

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    1. Oh, Kir. I adore your wonderful comments. Thank you, my beautiful friend. XOXO

      I am so looking forward to celebrating your birthday with you. :)

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  9. I love them both too Ivy! And in the limerick version, at least she was saved from the possible humiliation of failing;) Once again, my eyes lit up as I feasted on your delicious work:)

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    1. If she's a hopeless perfectionist like me, she probably would prefer death to failing a test. Haha!

      Valerie, thank you dearest. Your sweet words always warm my heart. XO

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  10. I love the first one! Flirty and fun!

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    1. Thank you, Ashley! I'm glad you enjoyed the lighter piece.

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  11. I liked them both
    (But the second one more.)
    (Which says more about me than your writing.)
    ;)

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    1. Ha! Thanks, EG. But I think the mere act of writing that piece says quite a bit about me. ;)

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  12. I loved them both, and I think limericks are an underrated art form LM x

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    1. Thanks, Lyssa. And I agree with you. Limericks are harder to write than they might seem. It's a fun challenge.

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  13. Oh, I love them both. But the first one...all substance, no style. Great line.

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    1. Thanks, Kelly. I like that line too. I pictured this sweet guy who doesn't dress the greatest but has a fantastic sense of humor. I'd give him a chance. :)

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  14. That first limerick is nice. But that second one... That second one, man... Brilliant. I absolutely love that you took the stereotypical opener -- "There once was a ___ named ___" -- and flipped it on its head. Really awesome work!

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    1. Thank you! I'm thrilled that last line is resonating with readers. I was pretty proud of the dark piece when I finished it. But then I pussed out and wrote the lighter piece. Next time I will go with my (dark, twisted) gut. :)

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  15. Ooh Ivy,you are a girl after my heart-just fell in love with the second one!You can be dark-darker-darkest whenever you feel like and if ever they decide to send you to prison,I will come with you -we can both cook up some more of these dark wicked tales,what say? :D

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    1. Atreyee, you crack me up! Thank you for the wicked awesome comment, my sister in darkness. :)

      The concensus is definitely in favor of the dark one, and it's my favorite, too. If this were a community-judged week (which is the only way I've ever made it to the winners' circle), I might kick my own ass for second guessing my work. I have learned my lesson though. From now on, if I am happy with a piece, I'm gonna run with it.

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  16. I love both of them! The contrast is fantastic - the light flirtiness of the first poem's last line vs the genuine menace of the second poem's last line. It's almost like you've got one narrator with a split personality, a Jekyll-and-Hydeness. I wish it were a 99-word challenge so you could put them together, and maybe add a third stanza, either from the girl's PoV or synthesizing the two previous ones. (There was a Trifextra challenge like that, way back when - we had to describe the same scene from 3 points of view, 33 words each.) Anyhow, great job!

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    1. I reread them after seeing your comment. I love your take on it--the idea that the sweet, seemingly harmless guy in the first poem is actually a sadistic killer by the third 33 words. So deliciously creepy!

      Thanks for leaving such a fantastic comment, Christine. It made my morning. :)

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  17. They are both really good, but I'm drawn to your dark side (shockingly!). I also love your comment about being 97% certain you'd never murder anyone. I like the margin of error you've left yourself. :-)

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    1. Thanks, Suzanne! I like to leave myself a little leeway. ;)

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  18. I like them both, but I totally prefer the dark one too! Stick to your gut next time! ;)

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  19. They are both equally worthy. Do you think Bram Stoker ever felt like that? The creepiest thing is that you are only 97% certain!

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    1. Haha! Good question. It's nice to think of successful authors having doubts. I ust read about J.K. Rowling doubting the end of her Harry Potter series. Makes me feel better. :)

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  20. I'm kinda glad you went with the less sinister one! haha Awesome work.

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    1. Well that's surprising, but I'm glad you enjoyed the lighter piece. Thanks. Draug!

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  21. All substance and no style works as you get older, I've found. :-) Thanks for linking up.

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