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Friday, November 1, 2013

A Contract Killing

This weekend's Trifextra challengeIn The Scorpio Races, author Maggie Stiefvater writes, "It is the first day of November and so, today, someone will die." Give us the next 33 words of this story, as you imagine it.


It is the first day of November, and so, today, someone will die.

But who will miss that beached whale? IHOP? Embarrassed lotharios who sneak her past their roommates? Not the unfortunate souls who’ve shared plane seats with her saddlebags.

She's signing that gym contract.

Today.
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24 comments:

  1. Ha. I like this one. Very clever. Really cleverly done. I like how at first you really think its going to be a traditional hit, you know, a real traditional contract killing, and then it turns out to be something else entirely, also a contract killing, but this time literally a "contract killing" (a gym contract) of her old fat self. Well done. You get the award for cleverness and creativity so far. :)

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    1. Wow! Thank you so much, SO. Your wonderful words have me grinning like a total goofball. :)

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  2. Ivy, I agree with Scriptor. I was all ready to have my heart crushed over this poor woman's lot in life-especially the embarrassed lothario bit-but then, it's all good! This is the best kind of contract killing;)

    Simply awesome, my friend!!

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    1. As a writer whose work I greatly admire and respect, your praise means so much to me. Thanks, friend!

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  3. I also like the twist - the gym membership contract. In a real sense she is dying...a new her waiting to be born.

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    1. Exactly! Glad you enjoyed my little tale. Thanks, Janna!

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  4. Well done Ivy. This is why I go to yours first. It's always something different. :D

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    1. Linda, that is so very sweet of you to say. Thank you!

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  5. You are amazing always give the prompts a twist I never see coming.

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    1. What can I say? I have a twisted mind. :)

      Thanks for the kind words, Glynis!

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  6. You're so good at giving us humor while sparing us the cheese. Thanks for linking up. I love your smart writing.

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    1. Well that totally made my day. Can't tell you how much I appreciate this lovely feedback. Thank you!

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  7. Haha, sounds like something I would turn into if I don't stay careful!
    Loved this piece Ivy :D

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    1. Thanks, TPM! I wrote this cautionary tale to remind myself not to snarf down my kids' Halloween candy. It's not working so well. :)

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  8. Excellent twist on the prompt. I admit to stumbling on the first read on the words "beached whale," as I live near the coast. Once I got my mind set, this piece was a delight.

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    1. Yes, I suppose "beached whale" has a different meaning to you. :) I'm happy you enjoyed the story. Thank you for stopping by and taking the time to comment.

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  9. A sensible girl ;-)Am glad she had the guts to face the facts and do something about it than sitting back and feeling sorry for herself!!Great writing like always,Ivy:-)

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    1. Atreyee, thanks for always leaving such thoughtful comments. I really appreciate the support for my work. :)

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  10. I love the word choices and the matter of fact humor

    well done

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    1. Thank you so much, Lance! Glad you enjoyed it. :)

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  11. Your recognisable style and wit!

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  12. Oh, Ivy! I signed that contract years ago and yet, and yet. You still have to actually go...
    Hahaha beached whale. Love it, love the voice.

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  13. I love this Ivy! So cleverly done. I love the way you pull the reader through each word to the brilliant ending!

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